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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
quantity
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number
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 of volumes which were borrowed from June to September
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2014 from four different village libraries.
Besides
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, the pie chart is given that shows the types of
books
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 in percents that were taken during
this
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 period.
Overall
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, the figure for Sutton Wood was the most
fluctuated
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 one. Others experienced
increase
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an increase
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 or decline.
On the other hand
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, the second graph presents 5 genres of
books
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 that were borrowed.
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 the data
showed
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 in the line chart, the figure for West Eaton rose from June to August reaching its apex.
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, it stayed without changing.
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it
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in
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 July, the number of
books
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 that were taken in Church Mount's library increased to 100. After that, it continued growing steadily and reached the same quantity as the previous one in August. The figure for Ryeslip always decreased throughout the period,
while
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 the same for Sutton Wood fluctuated from 270, 100 and 300 which is its prime. Based on the second graph, the kinds of
books
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 borrowed were Self-Help, Fiction, History, Science and Biography. The most popular were Fiction volumes with 43%
whereas
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 the least
favorite
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were
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 Self-Help
books
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 with only 10%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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