The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts illustrate the proportions of British pupils who speak more than one language in
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one university, different to English, over the period of 10 years. The graph shows six categories, German, Spanish, French, no other
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, another language and two other ones. As a general trend, Spanish was the most
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spoken
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2000 and 20010 by university students.
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, German was the least common
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in British
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in the same years.
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, other categories had slight
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and
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.
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, Both French and
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“no other language” displayed the same values
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% in 2000.
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, German had the same percentages as “two other
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the students. The other consideration assessed display values ranging from 15% to 20%.
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, four out of six variables showed
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identical percentages, 10%,
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highest preference in 2000,
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as French and “another language” category.
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, Spanish was the most common language
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2000 and 2010 by
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British university students. “No other
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” and French showed a significant decrease. But “two other
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” remained constant for 10 years studied.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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