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The bar charts show household expenditure across four main areas in the UK, Australia and Japan in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar charts show household expenditure across four main areas in the UK, Australia and Japan in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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Given is a bar chart
illustates
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illustrates
 three
nations
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nations'
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 family
costs'
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costs
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destribution
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distribution
 in four family aspects in 2013.
Overall
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, Housing contributed
most
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the most
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 percentage of cost in The UK and Japan,
while
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 Australia
Healthcare
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 was the
highst
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highest
 expenditure.
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 with The UK, Housing was the highest cost which was almost 30%. And Food and transportation at
the
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second place with about 20%.
Healthcare
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 was the lowest percentage which was approximately 10%. Moving onto
Australia
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Australian
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 household expenditure.
Healthcare
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 and housing both
were
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had
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highest
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the highest
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 cost
contibute
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contribute
 about 23%.
Thransportation
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Transportation
 was the next which was about 15%. Food
slightly
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 lower than transportation which was about 12%.
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 was Japan,Hosing was the highest more than 25%. Whilst food was lowest about 15% .
Healthcare
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 and
transpotation
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transportation
 at the same level with slightly higher than 20%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words healthcare with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditure
  • main areas of spending
  • comparative analysis
  • spending habits
  • economic factors
  • cultural influences
  • social contributions
  • prioritize
  • expenditure differences
  • spending patterns
  • chart analysis
  • aggregate spending
  • allocation of resources
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