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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world . Why is this? What are the advantages and disadcantages of solar energy.

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Humans are
effecting
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 the world so badly,
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 is day to day
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humans
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 starting
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energy
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 sources like solar
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countries are still using harmful gases and oils but nowadays
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governments
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 trying
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people
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 to use solar
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 because more cheaper than other types of
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 is renewable source. first of all,solar
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 when
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 use solar
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 they will spend less money
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energy
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considerably harmful
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enviorment
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environment
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 the atmosphere and
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healhts
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health
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 conclusion solar
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energy
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people
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 should use solar
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 in their
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 for their health and for giving the next generations a better world.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly by using paragraphs effectively. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to make your argument clearer.
Task Achievement
Provide more detailed examples to support your points. For instance, when mentioning government encouragement on solar energy, give specific examples of programs or policies.
Coherence and Cohesion
Some sentences are unclear due to grammatical mistakes. Focus on improving sentence structure to enhance clarity. Reading your essay aloud can help identify awkward structures.
Task Achievement
You have successfully mentioned both advantages and disadvantages of solar energy, covering the task requirement.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the main topic of solar energy effectively by discussing its environmental benefits and cost savings.
Coherence and Cohesion
Including a conclusion that reflects on the topic's importance and potential future impacts helps to effectively close the essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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