The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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The line chart provides key information about the proportion of
people
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living in
cities
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. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that there is an expected upward trend regards living in
cities
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.
In addition
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, there
are
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a significant
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fluctuation
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in the population of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Thailand and Indonesia,
whereas
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people
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from
Malaysia
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faced a direct increase.
According to
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what is shown, starting from 1970
people
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from
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Malaysia
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were
equivelant
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equal
to 30% of the total community
lived
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living
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in
cities
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. A decade later, Malaysians who lived in
cities
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grew by 10%,
while
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people
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from
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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remained constant. In 1990 , communities in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Malaysia
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were equalled to nearly 45%. 10 years later,
Malaysia
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faced a huge jump to 60% and
continue
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continued
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increasing,
however
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,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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shrinked
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shrank
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to 40% and slightly
rise
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rose
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until it
expected
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to reach 60%. In terms of
Indonesian’s
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Indonesians
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,
initially
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, roughly 12%
are
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tended to live in
cities
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, with a gradual rise in the next 3 decades until it reached approximately 25% which was
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equivalent
to Thais in the year
of
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apply
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2000. Thailand faced a jump to 50% in 2020,
while
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Indonesia reached 30%. It is expected that both Indonesia and Thailand to reach 40% and 50% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, philippines, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Population
  • Trends
  • Urbanization
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Comparison
  • Rapid increase
  • Plateau
  • Stabilization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic factors
  • Migration patterns
  • Natural disasters
  • Saturation
  • Time frame
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