The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Fatima

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The line graph demonstrates the number of closed and new shops that opened at the same location in 2011 and 2018

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, there

are

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have been

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eight years of closures and openings

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in shop’s

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shop’s

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shops

shop

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. The most

closures

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closured

shops was in 2013 and the

higher

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highest

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number of

opening

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openings

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was in 2011. First of all, in 2011 shops began to open and

they

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were 9000. In 2012 it

is increase

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increased

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to 4000.

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the

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next two years the number of stores

are

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growth

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the proportion

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to less and less.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Varied vocabulary

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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Fatima

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standard on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?