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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian households. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resukt from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting snd reposrting the kain features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian households. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resukt from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting snd reposrting the kain features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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"The pie chart displays the distribution of seven types of
energy
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 used in Australian households,
while
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 the other pie chart illustrates the
amount
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 of greenhouse gases emitted by these households
due to
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energy
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 use. "
Overall
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, a significant
amount
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 of
energy
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 is used in heating and
water
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 heating,
while
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 the largest
amount
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 of greenhouse gases comes from
water
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 heating and other appliances. A significant
amount
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 of
energy
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 is used for heating in Australian households, accounting for 42%. The second-largest
energy
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 consumption comes from
water
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 heating and other appliances, at 30% and 15% respectively. The least
amount
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 of
energy
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 is used for refrigeration, lighting, and cooling, at 7%, 4%, and 2% respectively. The highest rate of carbon emissions comes from
water
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 heating and other appliances, at 32% and 28% respectively. Greenhouse gas emissions
also
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 come from refrigeration, cooling, and heating, at 8%, 3%, and 15% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, amount, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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