Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, all
products
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include high levels of
sugar
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that contribute to a lot of health problems. In my opinion, even If the
price
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increases, it won’t tackle
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problem. I believe
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humans
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can find another way to solve
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issue I accept that
sugar
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is one of the
dangerous
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most dangerous
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products
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for humans. In most
communities
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communities,
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people think that increasing the
price
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sugar
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would solve the problem.
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, there are many reasons why it is not.
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, almost every product involves
sugar
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, which could facilitate the rise of
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price
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the price
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on
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of
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the other
products
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.
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bread, canned cans. On the label may be written that there is no
sugar
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, but they are hidden under another name fructose,
sucrose
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or sucrose
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, and people don’t notice that and think of a product without
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, but it is not. Lots of companies make clear organic
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and
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result
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result,
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it is much more expensive.
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food
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can keep and
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doesn’t
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spoil for a
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longer
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time, than organic
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.
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is a big reason why many people prefer
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non-organic
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. I hope that investing in organic
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would increase health, but
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would not change the cost of other
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that contain
sugar
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. I believe that the state should support
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production through investment.
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, keeping livestock, paying taxes and workers
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incredibly expensive to keep thinking about. Government support for agricultural production is
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crucial to
food
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security and economic stability.Farmers and agribusinesses face high costs for feed, veterinary services, equipment, transport of
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and modernization of production. Seasonal
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fluctuations, weather risks and global market forces
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make it difficult for the agro-industry to function sustainably. In conclusion,
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increasing
sugar
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prices might seem like a solution, it could negatively affect the affordability of many essential
products
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.
Instead
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, government investment in organic farming and consumer education would be more effective in promoting public health.
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Task response
Try to develop your main points with more specific supporting details or examples. This will enhance the strength of your argument.
Coherence and cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs have a clear central idea and use linking words to connect sentences and ideas smoothly.
Introduction and conclusion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion, setting the context for your argument and summarizing your stance effectively.
Task achievement
Your essay presents an interesting perspective by suggesting alternatives to raising sugar prices.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar consumption
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • encourage
  • expensive
  • reduce
  • effectively
  • discourage
  • tight budget
  • purchasing
  • disproportionately
  • lower-income individuals
  • healthier food choices
  • demand
  • regardless
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