The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar charts display the the proportions of four released
films
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and the
tickets
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for these
films
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that
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sold in the years 1996 and 2006.
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, The percentages of most released
films
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and their
tickets
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increased
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except
for romance
films
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. Drama was the highest released
film
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and comedy was the highest in the number of
tickets
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sold The
percentages
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percentage
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of
drama released
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drama-released
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film
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films
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went from a quarter in 1996 to just above the third which was the highest among all
films
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in both years but it was the second highest in
the
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ticket sales which was at nearly 15% and increased slightly to approximately 17%. Comedy grew from 20% to just a quarter in 2006 but it was the highest in the number of sold
tickets
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in both years at 20% in 1996 and went up to nearly 23% in 2006. Fantasy
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film
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was the second lowest released
film
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at nearly 11% and 16% in 1996 and 2006 respectively and it was the second lowest in the number of
tickets
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that are being sold at a tiny fraction in 1996 and grew to nearly 6%. Romance was the
lowest released
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film
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at approximately 6% in 1996 and remained relatively stable in 2000. The
tickets
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that are sold
to
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romance were 5% and
declind
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declined
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to a tiny fraction in 2000 as the lowest among all four
films
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, tickets, film with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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