The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The Brick Manufacturing Process

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The Brick Manufacturing Process
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represent
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the process used for
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bricks
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brick
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manufacturing in
building
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industry.
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, the process
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with clays
digged
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dug
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with excavators.
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, the main purpose of it is
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bricks
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being
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out
to
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delivery.
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with, clays are collected with excavators, followed by them placed on a metal grid
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fall into a roller.
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, it is mixed with sand and water and continued by the moulding processes. The process of moulding
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be done in two different ways, the first one is when the wet
bricks
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are
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with a wire cutter. Alternatively, the mixtures could be placed on a rectangle mould.
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, the
bricks
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are placed in a drying oven for 25 to 48 hours. The temperatures start from a moderate amount of 200
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degree
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celcius
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to 980
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degree
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celsius
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,
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it is increase to 870
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degree
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celcius
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to 1300
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celsius
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.
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the
bricks
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are placed inside a cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours.
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, the
bricks
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are done and ready for packaging,
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followed
with
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a delivery afterwards.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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