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The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Hà

The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Hà
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The
given
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bar chart demonstrates the percentage of British using the
Internet
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at
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in
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 different places between 1998 and 2004.
Overall
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, the proportion of
people
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 who could connect
Internet
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 experienced a similar fluctuation from 1998 to 2004. And in both 6 years, the figure of UK
people
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 who entered the network at home occupied the highest rate in the situations in which British browsed to
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Internet
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the Internet
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,
in contrast
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, the lowest is the statistic of
library
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the library
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. Regarding the first year, the situation accepted British to log in
the
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to the
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 network the most is home, which
account
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 for over 50%. It slightly dropped to around 45% in the 2-year period and rose back to the 1998 figure in the
last
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 year.
Subsequently
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, in terms of the proportion of
people
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 who connected to the network in work started at nearly 30% in 1998, there was a plateau from 1998 to 2002,
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this
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 percentage saw a dramatic decrease to around 10% in 2004.
People
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 accessed the
Internet
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 in college stood at 20% in 1998 but during six years, it didn’t change position .
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, the proportion of UK
people
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 using the
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internet
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Internet
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 at
library
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libraries
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 had
a
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an
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 upward trend from 10% to 15% between 1998 and 2000.
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 there was an insignificant
fell
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 to over 10% in 2004.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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