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The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Ha

The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Ha
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The given chart illustrates the circumstances
which
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under which
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the british
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british
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British
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 browsed the internet between 1998 to 2004.
Overall
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,
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home
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the home
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is
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has been
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 the most common location for accessing the internet over the years
while
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library
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the library
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 showed the lowest usage rate.
Start
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Starting
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 with 1998
home
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 is the highest rate of up to 50%, followed by
work
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 at approximately 30% and college was at about 20% and stood
at
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in
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final
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the final
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 position was
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library
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the library
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negligible
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at negligible
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about
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at about
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 10%. The second year was 2000 access
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in-home
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in
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at
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home
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the home
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 decreased slightly about 45% and
work
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approximately
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by approximately
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 30% ,
then
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 the university remained stable as the original at 20% and
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library
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the library
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 increased slightly
15
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by 15
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% In 2002, the
house
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houses
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keep
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kept
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 the percentage
same
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the same
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1998
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as in 1998
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,
initially
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50
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at 50
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%,
then
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 the
work
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 a half
home
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is
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was
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 approximately 25% , and college stable stood at 20% and
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library
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the library
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 negitlible 10%.
Finally
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, in 2004,
home
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 traffic increased to 55% the rate
home
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 2004 quite far away with 3
region
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regions
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.the
work
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 reduced to 10% and college and
work
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 respectively 19 and 11%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words home, library, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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