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The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps above illustrate the
architectures
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architecture
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 of Ryemouth's village in the past and in
present
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the present
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 day.
Overall
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, the structure of the features remained the same. With the ocean in the Southern
area
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, and a main road extending from
West
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 to East in the Southern
area
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, connected diagonally to the Upper
West
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side
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. In 1995, there
are
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were
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 9 different areas
consist
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consisting
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 of the sea, a fishing port, a fish market, a shopping
area
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, a hotel, a forest park, a farmland, and multiple housings. The housing
are
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is
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 located
in
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on
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 the Upper
West
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side
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,
on
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apply
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the opposite
of
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a
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farmland, and a forest park.
In
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On
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 the lower
side
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 is the hotel on the corner of the main road, crossed
to
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by
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 a cafe.
Then
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, lined up with the road are the shop and fish market
on
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apply
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the
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apply
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opposite
of
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apply
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each other.
Then
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, in
present
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the present
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 day, the farmland and forest park were turned into a golf and tennis
area
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. On the other
side
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, the housing has extended to the
West
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. The shop was replaced with several restaurants, as the hotel and cafe remained the same. The fish market has turned into apartments, and the fishing port was completely
buildozed
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bulldozed
.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, west, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential expansion
  • modernization effort
  • commercial
  • urban development
  • preserved
  • recreational areas
  • transportation infrastructure
  • eco-friendly
  • renovation
  • transformation
  • bike paths
  • car park
  • establishment
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