The graph below shows the percentage of UK homes using different modern technologies from 1996 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of UK homes using different modern technologies from 1996 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides data about how the percentage of UK homes using modern technology has changed over time.
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, all
rates
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increased consistently except for the figures
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the mobile phone which
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small
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fluctuation over the period. There are two types of upward trends in the graph: stable and erratic increases. As regards the
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in 1996 the
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of the
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player were around 60% and it reached a peak of approximately 83% with a slight increase from 1996 to 2003, so it was
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clearly the most popular home technology.
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, the
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of home computers experienced the same trend, but the
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were roughly 30% in 1996/97. There was a gradual increase, rising from around 30% to approximately 57%
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, the rate of mobile phones rose erratically over the period. The figure increased slightly to under 40 % in 1999 followed by a remaining constant
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last
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rate.
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for mobile phones overtook the home computer after 1999 and became the second most popular device. In 2003 the usage of mobile phones reached a peak of approximately 70%. The usage of internet access
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in 1998/99 with approximately 10% which was the lowest rate. There was a remarkable increase to roughly 35% until 2001 followed by a gradual climb to around 45%
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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