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The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph illustrates the amount of global
people
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 who applied to universities in the European nations.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of Chinese
applicants
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 has decreased over time.
However
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, the amount of American
applicants
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 has significantly increased to to the highest over all four nationalities. In 2004, the
Chinese
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number of Chinese
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people
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 who applied for
the
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apply
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university was just over 25000
people
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,
however
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, it declined to be the lowest in 2008 with a
number
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 of just above 15000
people
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.
In contrast
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, in 2008, the USA
applicants
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 had the highest
number
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 of applications and increased among all four nationalities and became a majority with a
number
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 of over 25000.
However
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, Russian students rose slightly over time with a
number
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 of 10000
applicants
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 in 2008. But
were
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there were
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 just above 5000 applications in 2004. Anyway,
Jappanese
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Japanese
people
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 had a variation of
students
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student
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 applications over the all period, but was all just under 5000
people
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, applicants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international applicants
  • universities
  • European country
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • growth
  • decline
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • applicants
  • institutions
  • attracting
  • seasonal trends
  • specific years
  • significant changes
  • policy changes
  • global events
  • diversity
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