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The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below
illustrate
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 the crime percentage in four
between
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nations (
American
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America
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,
United
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the United
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Kingdm
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Kingdom
, Australia , and
south africa
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South Africa
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)
the
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 period in 1985 and 2020.
overall
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 ,The was serious
assault
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assaults
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 increased in proportion in all countries ,
whereas
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 The Robbery started later in 2010 . on other the hand ,
The
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sexual violence and
cities
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city
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 homicide
were
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 not stable to continue at the
last
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 years . In detail, The serious assault was a significant peak of 250 on average in all trends
in
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 2003 to 2012 , but it was a gradual drop
at
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2013 to 2018. in
the
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fact , The robby
was starting
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 later different in
all
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figures in 2010 and
continue
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continued
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 to 2013
a
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stable average
100
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of 100
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 ,
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 it was proportion approximately 10
at
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 2014 and
drop
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 from 100 in 2015 to 2017. Moving on to sexual violence was a remain stable proportion of 48
in
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 2003 to 2014 , but it was a steady
a
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climb to 50
in
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from
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 2015 to 2017.
Afterward
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, the
cities
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city's
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 homicide
was
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a
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percentage
that
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remained the same
just
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 under 50 continuing in all years .

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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