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The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015
The bar chart compares
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export
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the export
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earnings
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 of different
products
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 in a certain country during 2015 and 2016. The table shows information on
percentage
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the percentage
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 variation in each
export
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 class between these two years. It could be inferred from the bar chart that exports of petroleum
products
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 generated the highest revenue in both years,
whereas
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 textiles contributed the least to
export
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earnings
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.
However
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, from the table,
it is clear that
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taxtiles
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textiles
 experienced
a
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the
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 largest increase in terms of
export
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earnings
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 from 2015 to 2016. Just over 60
billion
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dollars
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 of income were produced by exporting petrol in 2015, the
this
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 figure increased by 3%, reaching around 62
billion
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dollars
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 in the next year. Engineered
merchandises
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merchandise
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 underwent
a
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 8.5% positive percentage change, which is the second largest. The only category that decreased in
export
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 income was germs and jewellery, the figure dropped by 5.18% from 42
billion
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dollars
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 to just above 40
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016.
Export
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earnings
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 for agricultural
products
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was
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 the second lowest in 2015, standing at around 30
billion
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dollars
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.
Although
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 textiles transactions produced even less, earning 27
billion
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dollars
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income
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in income
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 in 2015, the percentage change in
this
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 category was the most significant, which was a 15.24% increase by 2016, reaching a similar revenue as that
by
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of
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 agricultural
products
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export categories
  • percentage change
  • economic implications
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • fluctuations
  • international trade relationships
  • top-performing categories
  • least performing categories
  • export values
  • global market trends
  • export priorities
  • economic strategies
  • future prospects
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