Some people believe that family is more important than friends. To what extent do you agree and disagree.

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Family is

heart

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of lives , providing love, care and a sense of

belongings

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. It is very important to cherish the beautiful moments with them. Some folks

thinks

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that family members

plays

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an imperative role than companions. I completely agree with

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statement. First and foremost, closed one plays thousands of

role

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in any child’s life. They act as a caregiver, mentor,

guider

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and friend

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apply

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also

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. The family always strengthens the bond by giving affection. They always stand by their kids in hard times and they never leave their side.

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, they assist their peers in making some important decisions

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their life.

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, if youngsters are confused

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subjact

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subject

for their

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education

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they will help them for sure ij finding their interest.

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family

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always

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accountable for

minor’s

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expenses

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as education, living or stationary. No one can do it except the family. The love and affection people receive from their

guiders

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, individuals cannot get from anyone else.

Statistic

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reveal that 88% of youth tend to feel happy and confident after discussing their issues with

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ones. In conclusion, without any doubt, friends

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has

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vital

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role in their life but no one can compare

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family.

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task achievement

To improve task achievement, elaborate more on why family relationships are more significant than friendships. Integrate counterarguments discussing the importance of friendships.

coherence cohesion

For better coherence, ensure all points flow logically. Consider using clearer transitions between paragraphs and ideas.

language accuracy

Improve grammatical accuracy for common errors like subject-verb agreement and spelling errors (e.g., 'subjact' should be 'subject').

task achievement

You have provided a clear position on the importance of family over friends.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are clearly presented, summarizing your stance well.

task achievement

You used personal illustration to support your points, which enhances task achievement.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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7
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

203 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

bond
support
unconditional love
shared values
mutual understanding
trust
emotional well-being
interdependence
societal norms
companionship
loyalty
advice
experiences
mentorship
trustworthy
reliable
reliable
cherish
strengthen
deepen
attach importance to
prioritize

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