The line chart displays the cities population proportion in Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020, along with the projections for 2030 and 2040.

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The charts present the percentage of people

population

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in several countries

such

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as the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, and how it prediction in 2030 and 2040.

Overall

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, the

population

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of all the countries are increasing through the period even how it predicted in 2030 and 2040. But, not like the other countries, in 1970, the Philippines was the country that had a high

population

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until the end of the period, it was in third place.

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, the Philippines had a 30% total

population

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in 1970, and getting increased by 50% in 1990.

then

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it slightly decreased to around 45% in 2010 and got up again at below 60% in 2040. Following, Malaysia had a massive

population

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increase throughout the period, just from 30% in 1970 to above 80% in 2040.

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, in 1970, Thailand and Indonesia had 20% and 10% community, respectively, and

lastly

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, continuously increased in 2040, to around 50% and upper 50%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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population proportion
line chart
historical trends
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economic impact
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The line chart displays the cities population proportion in Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020, along with the projections for 2030 and 2040.

In certain nations, parents have high academic expectations for their children, resulting in limited leisure time. What could be the potential benefits and drawbacks of this for the children and the society they are part of?

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