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The table below shows the production of potatoes, cabbage and onions in five countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the production of potatoes, cabbage and onions in five countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The given depicts the production and consumption of
potatoes
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, cabbage and onion in variant nations in 2012.
Overall
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, the consumption of
potatoes
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 (kg per person) and production of
potatoes
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 in million tonnes was 96 and 126.3 in Europe which was the highest in each
categories
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category
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. Regarding
use
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the use
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 of
patatoes
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potatoes
 in Africa, South and Central
America
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 and Asia was, 14.1, 23.6 and 25.8 (Kg per person) respectively.
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, North
America
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 and Europe
was
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 the leading
concumers
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consumers
consumer
 of
potatoes
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, cabbage and onion with, 57.9 kg and 96.1
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consequently
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respectively
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. In
year
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the year
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 2012, it can be observed that Asia
have
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apply
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produced
maximum
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the maximum
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 amount of vegetables, 131.2 million tonnes. It is followed by Europe, which is the second dominant nation in
cultivation
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the cultivation
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 of
potatoes
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 , with 126.3 million tonnes.
However
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, South and Central
America
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,
Afica
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Africa
 and North
America
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was
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were
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lowest
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the lowest
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 in use of
Potatoes
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, Onion and Cabbage and even
more
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apply
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lower in
the
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apply
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production too.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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