IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the adventages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadventages? Ain

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers #adventages #disadventages #ain
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In the coming years,
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
show examples
 will be available to go without
driver
Add an article
a driver
the driver
show examples
. I don’t think that cheaper
transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
show examples
 will
overcome
Verb problem
reduce
show examples
 the number of
people
Use synonyms
 who will become unemployed and
rising
Correct article usage
the rising
show examples
 risk of traffic accidents. On
one
Correct article usage
the one
show examples
 hand, if all cars, including buses, taxis , trains and trucks will be driverless, definitely the travel will cost cheaper rather than
usual
Correct article usage
the usual
show examples
 price. The transports will drive with the help
AI
Change preposition
of AI
show examples
 programs, which have
Correct article usage
the simply
show examples
simply
Change the word
simple
show examples
 purpose
to get
Change preposition
of getting
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 from point A to point B.
For instance
Linking Words
, there are taxis in the USA, that go without any driver or assistant, which is more cheaper and comfortable for individuals. On
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
 hand, it may lead
increasing
Change preposition
to increasing
show examples
 numbers of unemployed workers. A lot of
people
Use synonyms
 bringing
bacons
Change the wording
bacon
kinds of bacon
slices of bacon
portions of bacon
show examples
 to families with
this
Linking Words
 job and now lots of families will be left with their income.
Moreover
Linking Words
, there is no scientific evidence of the effectiveness of safety in driverless vehicles,
this
Linking Words
 actively demonstrates that
auto pilots
Correct your spelling
autopilots
show examples
 can’t
decide
Verb problem
make
show examples
right
Correct article usage
the right
show examples
 decisions to save
people
Use synonyms
’s
life
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
show examples
 in emergency situations. As soon as, they are programmed for only one purpose, getting to the planing location.
For example
Linking Words
, in 2009, in the USA
was
Correct pronoun usage
there was
show examples
 an accident
that
Change preposition
in
show examples
both
Correct pronoun usage
which both
show examples
 of
plane’s
Correct article usage
the plane’s
show examples
engine
Fix the agreement mistake
engines
show examples
 got damaged. And the only one person survived hundreds of
Use synonyms
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
 lives, by landing
plane
Add an article
a plane
the plane
show examples
 on the Hudson River.
That is
Linking Words
 why there should be drivers.
Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Strengthen the introduction and conclusion for improved cohesiveness. Presenting a clear concluding statement will enhance the essay's structure.
task achievement
Ensure each main point is clearly supported and relevant to the topic. Adding varied examples can improve the comprehensiveness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Make transitions between ideas smoother to give the essay better flow and readability.
task achievement
You present a clear argument by weighing the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
task achievement
Incorporated a relevant example from real life, such as the Hudson River landing, to support your point about human decision-making over AI.
coherence cohesion
The organization of thoughts presents your ideas logically, discussing each side of the argument in turn.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: