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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given data compares the underground criteria of
lines
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, total miles, annual journeys, and cost of ticket metro between six
countries
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 namely New York, London, Tokyo, Paris, Mexico, and Beijing.
Overall
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, New York City
is
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has
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 the most diverse track and length
whereas
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 Beijing
is
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has
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 the highest population who commute by train.
In addition
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, London Tube is the most expensive ticket metro
compare
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compared
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 to other
countries
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.
To begin
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 with, NYC has 24
lines
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rail
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of rail
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while
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 the London Tube has the smallest
lines
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which
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apply
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only totalling
of
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apply
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11
lines
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. Other
countries
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, Tokyo, Paris, Mexico, and Beijing, have a range number of routes from 12 - 19.
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, in terms of miles, New York City still remained dominant with 659 km but Paris only
operate
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operates
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 within 127 km. On top of that, the rest of
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countries
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the countries
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construted
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constructed
 the routes below
than
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apply
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357 miles.
Nevertheless
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, the annual
journeys
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journey
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 in Beijing is 3.6
billions
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billion
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while
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 other
countries
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 only
comprising
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comprise
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 below
than
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apply
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3.1
billions
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billion
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. Interestingly, the cheapest rate of ticket is
subway
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the subway
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 in Mexico and other
countries
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 have
cost
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costs
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 above $0.45.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lines, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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