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The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Ha

The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Ha
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The given line
graph
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 demonstrates the number of travel trips to and from the
UK
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 between 1979 and 1999 and the given bar chart reports the most famous place to visit by
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British
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the British
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 in 1999
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, regarding
to
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the line
graph
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, there was a similar upward trend in both the
figure
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figures
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 of abroad people who visited
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UK
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the UK
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 and
British
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 who
travel
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travelled
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at
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to
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the
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apply
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other countries.
Beside
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, the bar chart shows
the
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that
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 France is the most popular country in
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector of
UK
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 dwellers,
by contrast
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, the bottom of
this
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graph
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 was Turkey. Looking at the line
graph
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 in a more detailed view, start at the statistic of visitors from everywhere in the world
came
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who came
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 to
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UK
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the UK
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, it started at about 12
million
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 situations in 1979 and during 20 years, it experienced a tremendous skyrocket to over 50
million
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 trips. After that, there was a moderate rise in the number of
British
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 went
to
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apply
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overseas between 1979 and 1999, from 10
million
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 people to nearly 30
million
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 people specifically. Moving on to the bar chart, the
UK
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 residents keened on
traveling
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travelling
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 to France and Spain the most, stood at nearly 12
million
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 and 10
million
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 tourists respectively.
Subsequently
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, in
term
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terms
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 of three countries less than France and Spain, namely the USA, Greece and Turkey. In 1999, there were about 4
million
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British
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visited
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who visited
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 USA
while
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 the Greece was chosen to become
travel
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a travel
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 place by around 3
million
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UK
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 residents.
Then
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 5th the common country was Turkey
which
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where
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 2
million
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 guests came to
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, uk, british, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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