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The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.B

The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.B
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the line chart gives information
visits
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about visits
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 to and from the
UK
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 in the 80s to 90s and the bar chart
provide
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provides
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 data
the
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on the
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 most popular countries visited by
British
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the British
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 in 1999.
overall
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, visits
aboard
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abroad
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 by
UK
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citizen
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citizens
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 and visits to
the
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apply
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England by overseas
resident
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residents
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 increased in
everyyear
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year
.
While
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,
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apply
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 the bar chart for the most popular countries visited by
British
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the British
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 saw the popularity of France. The number of
UK
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 residents visiting foreign always increased from about 13 to 52
of
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apply
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millions
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million
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 people from 1979 to 1999.
Then
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, the number of
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overseas
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over seas
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overseas
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 residents who travel to England
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continue
countinue
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continued
 to grow in 20 years from
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nearly
nerly
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nearly
 10 to 28
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millions
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million
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 people In 1999, the most popular location visited by
UK
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citizen
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citizens
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 was France. It
was take
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took
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 the lead in rank and had occupied about 11,7
of
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apply
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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British travel.Spain
have
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has
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 number 2 in rank and on par with France with the amount of people was have an advantage
approximately
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of approximately
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 9,6
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millions
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million
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. USA, Greece and Turkey
also
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 had notable numbers 4,3,2 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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