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The graph shows the number of Internet connections in five countries between 2001and 2002 and the table shows the rate of growth during the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of Internet connections in five countries between 2001and 2002 and the table shows the rate of growth during the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the graph provided compares the users of the
internet
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 in South
Korea
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, the United States, Germany, Japan and Britain in both 2001 and 2002,
while
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 the table illustrates the climb in
internet
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 connections in the mentioned countries. In general,
although
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 using the
internet
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 was more popular in South
Korea
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, it was less prevalent in the United Kingdom;
however
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, the latter experienced the highest growth in
internet
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 connections. It is evident from the information supplied that South
Korea
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 had by far the highest
Internet
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 users, reaching from 18 per 1000 people in 2001 to 23 in 2002. Meanwhile, benefiting from the
Internet
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 was less popular in the USA, Germany and Japan, ranging from 4 in 1000 people in 2001 to 6 in 1000 people in 2002. In stark contrast,
however
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, a negligible number of 1 per 1000 citizens in Britain enjoyed the
Internet
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, reaching 3 in 2002.
Nonetheless
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, Britain has experienced the highest rise in
Internet
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 connections at 230%;
Whereas
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, having the highest
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internet
Correct quantifier usage
number of internet
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 users, South
Korea
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 has seen the lowest increase at 41%.
Also
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, moderate
this
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 trend in the other three nations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, korea with synonyms.
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