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Band 5

You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office.

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Dear Manager, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding that my card has not arrived and to bring
you
Correct pronoun usage
your

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 attention
the
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to the

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 concerns,I have encountered formally.I believe it is important to address
this
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 matter promptly to resolve. On January 11,I utilized
service
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a service

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 from your company.Unfortunately,my experience was far from satisfactory.I have received a letter from your bank,asking
I
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me

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 to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card.
However
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,the card was missing from the envelope.
This
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 issue
a
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had a

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significant impact on me,causing inconvenience and distress.I expected better from your company,and the current situation does not meet the standards of quality and service that I come to associate with your brand. In light of the above,I am seeking compensation for the
sevice
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service

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in question.I expect
to
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apply

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this
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 matter to be addressed promptly and
resolve
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resolved

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 to my satisfaction. Thank you for your prompt attention to
this
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 issue.I believe that,with your cooperation,we can resolve
this
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 matter amicably. Yours sincerely, Islomova Dilshoda

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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your content into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, to enhance readability.
task achievement
Include more specific details such as when the new card was expected and any follow-up actions you desire from the bank to achieve a more complete response.
task achievement
Your letter maintains a formal tone, suitable for writing to a bank's head office.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear closing, effectively wrapping up the issue and suggesting a resolution.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • acknowledge receipt
  • envelope
  • issuance
  • missing
  • reference numbers
  • account details
  • immediate action
  • replacement card
  • security measures
  • secure courier
  • express concern
  • inquiry
  • in-person pickup
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