The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

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Both maps show information about the transformation of an area between 1995 and the present.

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it is a place where the village was converted into a recreational one by changing buildings with another new version.The modifications

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and later are described below. On the one hand,the most significant adjustment in a new variation of the map is the number of houses,that were expanded.

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,farmland was replaced with a golf facility and

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a forest park was demolished and

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two tennis courts.

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replacements is the alternation of a shop and fish market with a restaurant and apartment.

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,next to the hotel was erected a car park in the east of the map,

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springing up a new fishing port on the sea.It is clearly seen that

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the locations of the hotel and cafe remained unchanged on both maps.

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altered version of the map directly reflected residents of the village more

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and

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them with

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easy access

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diverse locations.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

169 words

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Urban development
Infrastructure
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Commercial district
Public amenities
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