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An American film actor once said, “Tomorrow is important and precious”. Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the most famous actors of
USA
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 has a very important quote and advice for people that they have to focus on the
future
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 as it is more significant, meanwhile, many individuals support
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agree
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 with
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 statement, and in
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 it. First and foremost, I believe that we do not have an opportunity to change our current lives
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 it is absolutely possible
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 the
future
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. The present is always the past after a day, and we can not go back to it to alter any bad decisions.
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 to say, we should get experience from
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the present
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 about our behaviours and attitudes, and use
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 in the
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 to be a better person.
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,
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, if a person cannot start a new hobby or has never done anything that he has
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 for, tomorrow is always a new chance to have a new beginning.
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modern life is rushed and exhausted. As humans, who have a desire to live, try different hobbies, and go to other countries, sometimes we can forget about ourselves during
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 day
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 the many responsibilities. But if we stack every day on thinking about why we have not
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 any improvement, it can
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demotivate
 us so well. We should move on since we still have time to do it tomorrow. In conclusion, in my opinion,
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future
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the future
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 is a great time to spend more time with ourselves, and
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not overwhelmed
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by
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 the current world.
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Strengthen your arguments by providing more specific examples or evidence to support your points.
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Improve idea clarity by organizing your thoughts into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph logically follows from the one before, maintaining a coherent and smooth flow of ideas.
introduction
Your introduction effectively presents the topic and your stance.
conclusion
You have a conclusion that summarizes your points and reiterates your stance effectively.
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The central theme that the future offers potential for change and improvement is consistently conveyed.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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