Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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many
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spend their
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working not interesting jobs. In
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we will discuss the reason
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tendency and the consequences. First of all, the vast majority of
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in the world
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on
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society
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influence.
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talents inside himself
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he will change the speciality at university or job.
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, self-confidence is an essential part, because
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people
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are frightened of trying
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something new for
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.
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, it leads to remaining at one workplace year by year.
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who work at one organisation yearly
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live
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, and
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the
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of their
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, they forget about themselves and their talents, they will just work for survival.
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, there are some places which will not have job prospects.
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, their communication ways and
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will not improve.
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, after many years they will regret
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their choices. In conclusion, if
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have better
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in order to improve themselves
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each side, they can select
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valuable
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it
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. It depends on
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option, and there is one citation '
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your days are the same for each other you spend the time in vain'.
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Your essay includes personal insights and reflections on the topic, which adds a personal touch to the response.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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