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The diagrams below show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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is talk
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 about stages in the development of simple cooking equipment. in
this
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i
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 will summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons between stages in
development
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the development
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 of cooking equipment they are vas over the
sone
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same
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,
clay
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 shhield mental dish .
i
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 will start with
the
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apply
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peicture A,
B
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and B
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becouse
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because
 they are almost
same
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the same
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 in the past they
are cooking
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were cooked
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by
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 pimitive ways
the
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they
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use
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jar
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 over the stone and they used
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clay
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a clay
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 shield and both of them
made
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 from
clay
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 and water they
mix it
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togather
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together
 and
exposure
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 to the sun until it get dray. I think the food it has made in it has
special
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a special
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 taste.
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hand
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i
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 will
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explain
explaine
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explain
 picture C the way of cooking
get
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improve
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improved
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 they
start
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started
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 to use
mental
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a mental
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,
grate
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a grate
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 for charcoal , support for pot ,
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clay
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the clay
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 lining air and ash it is designed with
door
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a door
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 and handle in
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the equipment of cooking it is in continuous development it will not stop generation after generation
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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