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You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organiser of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include •Details about the meeting •The problem you face •What should be done

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Hello , MR Mohammed , I hope
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 meeting , I would like to share them with you .I hope you
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can

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 understand me . In the beginning, We had meetings monthly
for
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to

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discuses
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discuss

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about
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apply

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our business, We always
invite
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invited

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 the essential people,
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 meeting
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was
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were

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coming
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many people who were not helpful ,
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, The hall was not enough for them .
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Also
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Also,

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 the air conditioner was not working , When I wanted to park my car , I could not find anyone in front of the hotel .
Therefore
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 , You have to increase your team and
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 fix the hall , You ought to change the air conditioner .
At
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In

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conclusion, It was
unsuccessful
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an unsuccessful

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 meeting because of you . Thank you , I am looking forward to hearing from you . Best regards Osama Alkanhal

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Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your thoughts into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity.
Task Achievement
Address why unhelpful attendees affected the meeting.
Task Achievement
Use a more formal tone, especially in addressing solutions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter starts with a polite greeting and ends with a suitable closing.
Task Achievement
The issues regarding uninvited attendees and malfunctioning facilities are clearly stated.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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