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In the past ,most people worked for small businesses, while more people now work for large businesses . what are advantages and dis advantages of working for large businesses

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The importance of working for someone which was always debatable has become more controversial with many
people
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 claiming it is beneficial
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 others reject
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 notion.
This
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 essay will delve into the pros and cons of working for a big
company
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. First and foremost, in the bygone era,
people
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were
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did
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 not
having
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 access to new opportunities as most of the population
were living
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lived
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 in rural areas so they tended to start their own
business
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businesses
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 which allowed them to gain personal experience.
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, nowadays
people
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 are more likely to work for other organizations rather than
setting
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 up their own business because it assists in making
them
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expertise
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, more creative than before, gain knowledge
that
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how's
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the
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things work and
other
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many more benefits. Statistics reveal that 79% of
population
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the population
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 choose to be
employee
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employees
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 rather than be the
owner
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owners
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 of small
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company
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companies
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.
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, they do not have to worry about
profit
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the profit
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 and loss of the
company
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 as
the
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 end of the month they will get their salary in their account
along with
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 some bonus. Moving
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, every coin has
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two sides,
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likewise
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likewise,
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 it
also
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 has some drawbacks. As
a
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 employee in any
company
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 can
hinders
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 your personal growth as you are doing the same thing
everyday
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. It will lead to issues
such
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work life
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 balance, low creativity, fixed schedule, lack of ideas and so on. Findings indicate that almost 76% of
people
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 find themselves
frustrating
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while
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 working for someone and
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at
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in
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 the
end
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end,
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 they
chose
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 to resign. In conclusion,
although
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 it has some benefits,
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also
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it also
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numerous
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has numerous
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 drawbacks which can create big problems in future. It totally depends upon someone's mental capabilities
either
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whether
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 they want to become an employee or owner.

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task achievement
Include specific examples to support your arguments and clearly illustrate the advantages and disadvantages of working in large businesses. This will strengthen the task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Improve cohesion by using linking words and phrases effectively to ensure that arguments flow logically. For instance, using phrases like 'on the other hand' can enhance contrast between sections.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, summarizing the main arguments effectively.
task achievement
The writer addresses both pros and cons of working for large businesses, which covers the task's requirements adequately.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job security
  • stability
  • salary
  • benefits
  • career growth
  • advancement
  • resources
  • training
  • networking
  • professional connections
  • diverse job opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • professional development
  • support
  • flexibility
  • autonomy
  • bureaucracy
  • hierarchical structure
  • individual recognition
  • personal connection
  • competition
  • pressure
  • adaptation
  • organizational changes
  • creativity
  • innovation
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