The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
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present
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U.S.
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the U.S.
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consumptions
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consumption
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of energy by fuel since 1980 with
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prediction
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for the next years .The six sources of energy were (
petrol
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and
oil
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,coal,natural
gas
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,nuclear,solar and hydropower.
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,
petrol
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and
oil
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were and remain on the top with the most
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consumption
source of energy in America .
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coal and natural
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were fluctuate
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during
years
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at the second position, the other three sources were the least
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one
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to use. During
history
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the historical
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period (1980-2008) ,
petrol
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and
oil
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was
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the most
material
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materials
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used by
citizen
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citizens
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with close to 40 quadrillion units.
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natural
gas
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came
at
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the
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second place with
closly
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close to
20 units,coal
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third place with almost 19
unit
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units
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. On the projection time (2008-2030),
petrol
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and
oil
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preserve
it
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position with a significant increase
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by 2030.
coal
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consuming
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also
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will
increse
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increase
to overtake natural
gas
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until
reach
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the peak of 30 units with
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expection
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expectation
exception
of natural
gas
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consuption
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consumption
to remain steady in the next few years.
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, nuclear,
soarl
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solar
,wind and hydropower
ranging
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throughout the past
then
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keep constant use in future with 5,4,3 unite for nuclear,solar and wind ,
hydropowe
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hydropower
hydro power
(respectivly).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, oil, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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