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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditure for five major categories in the United States, Canada, The United kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditure for five major categories in the United States, Canada, The United kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares the amount of
money
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 spent across five main groups (
food
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, housing,
transportation
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, health care and clothing) by four different countries (United States,
Canada
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, the United
Kingdom
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, and Japan) in 2009. As reflected by the y-axis, the data is calibrated in percentage. At first glance, it is evident that the major expense of all nations was on
food
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, housing and
transportation
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.
Whereas
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 health care and clothing are the groups where citizens of these countries spend very little
money
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
transportation
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 is a greater expenditure in comparison with
food
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 in only the United States and
Canada
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. At the outset, all four nations spend the most
money
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 on housing, which ranges between 20% and 25%.
Furthermore
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, The U.S. and
Canada
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's expenditures on
food
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 are less than 15%,
while
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 the United
Kingdom
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 and Japan invested nearly 21% and 23%, respectively.
However
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,
this
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 is totally opposite in the case of
transportation
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. The main spenders on
transportation
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 are The USA and
Canada
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, with 24% to 25% and the United
Kingdom
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 and Japan stood at 15% and 10%, respectively.
Conversely
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, the most
money
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 spent on healthcare is by the US citizens, which is around 8% and all other countries' expenditures lie under 5%.
Similarly
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,
Canada
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 and the United
Kingdom
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 spend just over 5% on clothes and others spend below 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, food, transportation, canada, kingdom with synonyms.
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