The diagram below illustrates the production of a lead pencil. Ainazym.

The diagram below illustrates the production of a lead pencil. Ainazym.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below illustrates the production of a lead pencil. Ainazym.
The diagram illustrates an algorithm for
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pencil manufacture.
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, it is a man-made cyclical process, which has 12 main stages, a little equipment and some resources. The entire process begins with the growth of
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some seeds and finishes with
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of ready pencils.
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,
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are planted and nurtured for about four months, during which they develop into
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small plants. These saplings are
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replanted into a larger area, where they are able to grow enough for three years before being thinned. The trees continue to grow for fourteen years until they are cut down. The harvested woods are treated and cut into
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thin and small slices . These slats are grooved and filled with black leads.
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a new slat is glued on
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, which reminds a
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structure.
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structure is hard-pressed and heated by special equipment, which ensures a new pencil’s density.
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, the pencils are cut into individual pieces and packed
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a small box, completing the pencil production process.

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