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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 120 100 80 60 40 20 0 2003 2004 2005 2006 Percentage of adults by age group using the Internet from 2003 to 2006 16-24 25-44 45-54 55-64 65+

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 120 100 80 60 40 20 0 2003 2004 2005 2006 Percentage of adults by age group using the Internet from 2003 to 2006 16-24 25-44 45-54 55-64 65+
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The bar chart
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shows
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 a proportion of adults of various
age
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 categories in the United Kingdom
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utilising
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utilities
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utilising
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 the
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Internet
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internet
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Internet
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 every day between 2003 and 2006 .
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, we can see that there
were
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 a gradual increase in all
age
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 groups.
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,
people
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 who are 65
years
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 old and
more
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older
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 were the lowest users of
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the internet
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internet
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the internet
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 in all
years
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.
According to
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 the bar chart , in 2005 all
age
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 groups had more
utilities
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internet
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 than
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other
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years
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 except the
people
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 who are from 16 to 24
years
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 old.
People
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 who are from 16 to 24
years
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.
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old.
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, the following
age
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 group reached
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the
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 peak in 2005
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of
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by
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of
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 100%.
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, there was a gradual increase in the usage of
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Internet
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the Internet
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by
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for
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by
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community
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the community
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 from 24 to 54
years
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 old.
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, the usage of
internet
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 for the
people
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 between 55 and 64 fluctuated over the 4
years
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apply
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from
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apply
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2003 to 2006 ).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, internet, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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