some people think that teacher should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so they can behave. Others say that teacher should only teach student academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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many people
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that
teachers
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duty
solely to teach
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pupils
pupil
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,
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agree with the opposite opinion that presents that the
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responsibilities
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beyond just teaching . On one
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, since the students spent the majority of their time( more than 12 hours daily) at school .That means
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and all the institution
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, play
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a crucial
role in children guiding
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to the right way to react and interact
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each other and with the
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environment
around them by opening eyes on the right and wrong
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.
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, how they
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them self
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difficult
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as bullying .
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, a study established years ago
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found that students who get
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privete
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private
learning and high
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to good
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tend to
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become
more mature and
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a huge impact on their
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society
with good personal and
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psychological
growth .
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,regardless
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important the
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teachers
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roles
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rise
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good behive
human
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,
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putting
all the weight on them
not
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does not
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exempt the
perants
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parents
and other factors from their
rols
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role
.they argue that tracher primary focus should be on
acadimic
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academic
instruction , as
this
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their main core responsibility.From
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perspective
teaching moral values
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as the role of the parents or guardians
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educators. In my opinion ,
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parents play
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role in teaching moral
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values
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,
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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also
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contributer
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contribute
contributor
contributes
significantly
due to
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the time students spend in school.A balance could be achieved by
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integrate
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integrating
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moral
lesson
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lessons
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into their
dialy
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daily
interaction and classroom activities without compromising
acadimic
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academic
content.
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Ensure all paragraphs have a clear topic sentence to improve coherence.
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End your essay with a clear conclusion summarizing the main points discussed.
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You have demonstrated an understanding of both perspectives on the topic.
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The essay shows a good effort in addressing the question and main viewpoints.

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