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The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The life cycle of the Monarch butterfly consists of four stages: egg, larva (
caterpillar
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), pupa (chrysalis), and
adult
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 butterfly. Compare the duration of each
stage
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, with the egg
stage
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 lasting around 3-5 days, the larva
stage
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 lasting about 2 weeks, the pupa
stage
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 lasting 10 days, and the lifespan of the
adult
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 butterfly being 2-6 weeks. Describe the transformation process from egg to
caterpillar
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, highlighting the hatching process and how the
caterpillar
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 feeds on milkweed. Explain how the
caterpillar
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 grows and sheds its skin several times during the larva
stage
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, indicating growth and
molting
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moulting

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 periods. Highlight how the
adult
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 butterfly emerges from the chrysalis and
notes
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note

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 the time it takes for its wings to unfold and dry. Mention the role of milkweed plants as both a food source for caterpillars and a place where butterflies lay their eggs. Detail the reproductive cycle of the
adult
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 butterfly, emphasizing its role in laying eggs to start the cycle anew.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words caterpillar, adult, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • Monarch butterfly
  • eggs
  • milkweed plants
  • larvae
  • caterpillars
  • feed
  • chrysalis
  • pupa
  • metamorphosis
  • emerge
  • adult butterfly
  • repeat
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