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The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.

The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.
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This
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 line chart illustrates how much CO2
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 produced per person in European countries during four decades.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the United Kingdom was the highest country to produce the gas among the other nations.
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 , Portugal in 1967 started to highly
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 the average from about one metric tonne to around five metric
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 in 1997 . After that, the emission begins to remain steadily till 2007. Sweden in 1967 their average was slightly high
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 it started to rise from above eight metric
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 to around eleven metric
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 in 1977 ,
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 suddenly the production swiftly declined to under eight metric
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 in 1987.
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, in Italy in the same
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 their emission gradually goes up.
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, the two countries with the highest production of gas were the United Kingdom and Sweden,
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 the least was Portugal.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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