The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following diagrams give us information on the main reasons and how many
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per week
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people have worked from home in 2019. It is evident that
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are more dominant than
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when it comes to productivity
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working remotely. It is shown that 81% of
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work remotely over 30
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per week, whilst for the very same category,
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work only 6%. But when it comes to
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10
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of labour category, we can see, once again, a really big discrepancy between the two main groups, but
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time, with
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being 74%
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males
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with only just 3%. The only group where we have an average of 20% for both genders, is the 10 to 30
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of remote work. It can be noted that both communities have gone with saving
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money as a response to the main reason they stayed home query, with 45% of
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and 42% of
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. The majority of men
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felt more productive when they were working from home, but when it came to easier childcare as a reason, only 4% of them chose it, whilst women
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this
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cause reaching a decent 26%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • flexible schedule
  • family responsibilities
  • gender roles
  • professional duties
  • societal trends
  • economic responsibility
  • home-working hours
  • traditional roles
  • male-dominated industries
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