The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual
The given pie charts illustrate the
proportion
of men and women in employment in six general sections in 1992.
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Overall
, the managerial and professional accounted for a large Linking Words
percentage
in both genders. Use synonyms
In contrast
, the Linking Words
percentage
of general labourers was the lowest Use synonyms
proportion
for both sexes.
Looking at the charts in more detail, the Use synonyms
proportion
of managerial and professional in females and males was observed at 29% and 36%. Use synonyms
In addition
, other manuals ranked second in both genders. Linking Words
While
clerical or related accounted for the largest Linking Words
percentage
at 31% in females, the Use synonyms
percentage
of clerical or related in males was 6%. Use synonyms
In contrast
, the Linking Words
proportion
of craft or similar in men accounted for 24%, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
percentage
of craft or similar in women was observed at 3%. Meanwhile, the figures for the remaining sections Use synonyms
such
as general labourers and other non-manual were small segments.
To summarize, regardless of gender, most people preferred managerial and professional. Linking Words
Whereas
most employees didn’t want general labourers.Linking Words
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