A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
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accelerated research on Unnecessary verb
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oil
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offer
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particularly
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countries
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energy resources. Correct quantifier usage
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market
to purchase their products Correct article usage
the market
due to
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effects
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the environment like land and water pollution.
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feasibility analysis and market research for developing new products. Change the verb form
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project
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make
worst
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need
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environment
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the environment
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