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The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the direct financial support made by 4 various organizations to developing states in 4 different years (from 2008 to 2011). All in all, aid from organization D oscillated over time and noticeably dropped
at the end
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 of the timeframe. Spending of organisations A and B increased over the given period, where B represented a dramatic increase. Institution's C contribution to international monetary assistance changed over time, but eventually remained at the same level as it started in the first
year
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. In detail, association D started at approximately 0.6
billion
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 dollars and dramatically decreased to about 0.3
billion
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 in 2009. In the following
year
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, financial aid from
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 organization accounted for 0.5
billion
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 but rapidly dropped to 0.1
billion
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 in the next
year
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. Institution A started from 0.5 and sharply increased to about 0.7
billion
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,
then
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 plateaued until 2010. From 2010 it rose noticeably up to 1
billion
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 in the final
year
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. Institution B plateaued from 2008 to 2009 at the level of 1.5
billion
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 but rocketed to 2.5 in 2010 and grew
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by 1
billion
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 in the following
year
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, comprising an overwhelming 3
billion
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. Organization C contributed to monetary aid by donating 1.5
billion
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 in 2008, which sharply rose approximately to 1.7, and
then
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 rapidly decreased to about 1.1
billion
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At the end
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 of the timeframe, it returned to the initial point.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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