Some believe that because everyone needs a place to live, governments should provide houses for those who are too poor to afford their own. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Opinions differ regarding whether or not individuals who cannot afford houses are given by

governments

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' policies because

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housing is crucial for

people

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to live.

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critics insist that

people

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have a responsibility to buy a house, I personally strongly disagree with

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assertion since

problem

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that individuals cannot afford

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apply

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the governments'

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governments'

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responsibilty

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responsibility

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with,

thereare

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there are

two major reasons why

authorities

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have to provide

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housings

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for those who are too poor to buy their own.

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, by providing houses, they can live stable

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. To explain,

people

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in the low-income bracket are struggling to pay their home rent prices and

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it is

dislikely

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dislike

to spend money on their basic needs like groceries and leisure activities.

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governments

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can give equally

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birthright

that

people

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strat

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start

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same line.

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, if

authorities

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provide

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housings

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housing

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to citizens in the low bracket, they can save money that they spend

rent

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on rent

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, which motivates them to work more.

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, not only can

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productivity

increase but

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also

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would grow. On top of that,

governemts

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governments

have a responsibility for problems that

people

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who are too poor cannot afford houses. First and foremost,

authorities

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should take the initiative to tackle the problem.

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, if

governments

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enforce laws that provide

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housings

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housing

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to the

people

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in the low-income bracket, they can guarantee

better

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a better

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quality of

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lives

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life

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and

therefore

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not to mention

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that they can deal with housing problems by enforcing laws. In conclusion, if

governments

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provide

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housings

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housing

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people

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, they can live stable

lives

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and spend money for purposes.

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this

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reason,

authorities

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should enforce laws that would solve housing

problem

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problems

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to guarantee

better

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a better

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quality of

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lives

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life

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There is a nice attempt at structuring your arguments, which contributes to the logical structure.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

272 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

- Economic security
- Essential needs
- Allocate resources
- Social stability
- Reduced inequality
- Social tension
- Cohesive society
- Secure housing
- Health outcomes
- Susceptible to illness
- Stimulate economic growth
- Construction materials
- Ethical responsibility
- Less fortunate members
- Just society

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