The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show the improvement of each area at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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, the buildings kept in the same place were the car park with half of the original area proportion and the hospital building which was located at the side of the main road and still gained a similar Acer. A shopping

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no longer existed in 1980 and were replaced by a cancer

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, pharmacy department and

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nursing school. To start, in 1960. The land was divided into 4 parts equally before the five areas were shared

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1980 until nowadays for

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new specific fields which include the cancer

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, and pharmacy section. In 2000, The largest part of Queen Mary Hospital was the

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of cancer treatment compared to the other buildings which are allocated in the same proportion except the hospital building which remains the same spot and area

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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initial facilities
replacement
significant extension
absorbed
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adjacent
evolution
enhancing healthcare services
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medical facilities
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The diagrams show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

“Some people believe that exercise is the key to good health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important.” Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Nowadays in many countries young people leave rural areas to study or work in cities. What are the reasons for this? Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.