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Band 4.5

The internet is a good source of information and opened up opportunities for people all over the world. Is all information reliable online? What could be done to control information online?

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In the contemporary era, a social network provides a significant number of opportunities to people throughout the world.
This
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how
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 trustworthiness of
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 on the internet and
controlling
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the controlling
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 methods of
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 situation. Nowadays,
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technology advances and
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 leads to
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various
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of various
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 business places regarding
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news
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, social media and other online
platforms
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.
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, it’s impossible to have direct access to information on the internet, which you are seeking
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.
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, the vast majority of people use phones, laptops and other technology devices
within a daytime
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during the day
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. Everyone posts or snaps everything on the social
platforms
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,
such
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 as,
tik tok
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Facebook
,
facebook
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Instagram
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,
instagram
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apply
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and snapchat especially
younger
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the younger
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 generation plays a
momumental
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monumental
 role in
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 action.
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 trend makes
inevitable
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of
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for
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 any
data
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,
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that sharing
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to be shared
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 on
the
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online
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, another vital factor is unreliable information sources, which
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 by private sectors for earning a huge amount of money. To illustrate, private and personal
news
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 accounts share posts and
news
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 regularly via the social
platforms
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 almost
everyday
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. The main reason
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this
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 action is
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the rising
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viewers’ number
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number of viewers
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 and
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 users in watching
news
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 to receive a substantial sum of money.
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 the other hand,
government
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the government
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 is responsible to implement strict rules in both the public and the private sector to
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strike
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, it should be implemented
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 tools, which recheck entire posts, videos and content to regulate well-being.
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 some
contents
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 may hold
data
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 against legislation,
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then with helping
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with the help
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 of
AI
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AI,
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 we can eliminate these resources from the social
platforms
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. In conclusion,
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 the internet and social media offer vast global opportunities, online
data
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 is frequently unreliable. To address
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 issue, governments must enforce strict regulations and
utilize
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utilise
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 AI-driven tools to filter out illegal and misleading content.

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overall score
Estimated score: 5. The ideas are on topic, but they need clearer support and a more direct answer.
task response
Answer the first question more directly at the start. Write clearly: “No, not all information online is reliable.” Then explain why.
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Your first body part is not fully clear. Too many people using phones and posting online does not by itself show why information is not reliable. Focus on false news, fake accounts, and posts made for money.
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Give one clear example. For example: a fake health post may tell people to buy a product that does not work.
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For the second question, give more than one way to control information. You can write about government rules, checks by social media sites, and teaching people how to check sources.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part about one main idea. Body 1: why online information may be false. Body 2: what can be done to control it.
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Use clearer topic sentences. For example: “There are several reasons why online information is not always reliable.”
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Some links are not used well. Use “On the other hand” only when you show a different side. Here, “To solve this problem” is better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep examples close to the main point. The list of apps is long and does not add much. Use one short example and explain it.
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You answer both questions. You say that not all online information is safe, and you give a way to control it: rules and AI checks.
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Your main idea is clear: some people share false news to get more views and money.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “For example”, “Furthermore”, “As a result”, and “In conclusion”.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repository
  • accessibility
  • credibility
  • regulation
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • biased reporting
  • public opinion
  • fact-checking
  • curate
  • digital literacy
  • discern
  • censorship
  • free speech
  • integrity
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