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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over the past 30 years,
car
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 production and sales
has
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 increased so rapidly,
most
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that most
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of
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the
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people
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 now own a
car
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 in many
cities
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 around the world. I totally agree that
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a raise
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raise
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rise
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 in
car
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 ownership causes
traffic
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 jams in many urban areas. Governments should encourage public
transports
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transport
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 and provide free passes to public trains. Increasing
car
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 taxes can discourage
people
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to buy
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from buying
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cars
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. In many countries, especially Cosmopolitan and Metropolitan
cities
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 owning
in
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a
car
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 has become a trend.
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, some rich
people
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 own more than one four-wheeler as a status
of
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symbol.
On the other hand
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, to tackle air pollution and escape from harsh weather few buy
cars
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. so, there is a huge
raise
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rise
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 in
cars
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 on the roads, which causes
traffic
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 congestion.
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,
cities
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 like Bangalore and Chennai
has
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have
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 peak
traffic
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 of 30 minutes to 1 hour in
early
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the early
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 morning and evening. Everyone wants a cosy ride in
cars
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 and ultimately it leads to
traffic
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jam
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jams
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. In most
of
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the
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countries encouraging public rights
such
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 as buses or Metro trains can significantly reduce the usage of
cars
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 public vehicles not only reduce the commute cost but
also
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 save
lot
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a lot
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 of time.
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 to that, increasing
car
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 tax and road
tax
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taxes
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 discourages
people
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to buy
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from buying
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cars
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. Even though it is not possible in some countries still helps to decrease
the
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car
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owning
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ownership
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. Some study shows that, after
implementation
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the implementation
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 of free public
transports
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transport
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 in uk,
traffic
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 congestion has been reduced by 30
percent
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per cent
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.
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,
people
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 should
have
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awareness
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about
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of
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traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and use
the
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their
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car
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 when absolutely necessary. In conclusion, owning a
car
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 has been risen more rapidly and causing
traffic
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 congestion in many
cities
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.
Government
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The government
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 should take measures
such
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 as implementing high taxes on
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car
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cars
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 and giving free public
transports
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transport
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 can significantly reduce the
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 in many urban
cities
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.
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