Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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essay attempts to argue that foods and beverages containing excessive

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might impact health.

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,

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of blindly elevating the price of sugary

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, a more effective approach would be to reduce the

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in the

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themselves.

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are

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added to food and drink

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in the market these days in order to enhance their tastes and

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attract consumers, but

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could bring about a range of diseases.

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some statistics, around 30% of the food items, and more than 75% of the beverages in the market contain additive

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that surpasses the standard amount of

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intake for an individual per food consumption. These high-

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products

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pose challenges to human bodies which are grappling with digesting and absorbing

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sugars, leading to not only physical but

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mental diseases. The rise in diabetes and high blood pressure

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high-

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market.

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, research has shown that undue

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intake could indirectly cause a lower concentration

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and even depression. Perhaps the first suggestion that would come out as a solution to the current situation is to increase the price of

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, but it could not act as a long-term strategy. It is highly likely that lifting up

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could not

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its end goal -- discouraging

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consumption. Consumers who rely heavily on those sugary items might still invest

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them, even with much more money. In

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, not only the health issues could not be addressed, but the economy might

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experience a decline

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the drop in

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level of the customers. A more

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tactic could be to limit the

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in

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by formulating regulations. In conclusion,

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that high-level

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various

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physical

and mental health issues. It

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suggests that making

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more expensive could not effectively address the problem,

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,

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should be diminished inherently from the

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.