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The free movement of of goods Across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argues that it is necessary for economic growth, whilst others claim that it damage local industries. Discuss with both views and gove your opinion.

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Recently, the issue of
free-trading
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free trading
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 across overseas has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that it is essential for economic
growth
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,
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 others argue
otherwise
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. I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion with my opinion. On the one hand, some people claim that local
shops
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 struggle to compete
cheaper
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at cheaper
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 prices with global industries.
While
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 owners of local
shops
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 can’t provide the prices, large
shops
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 can provide cheaper prices.
This
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 means that it can
be
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lead to
close
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the closing of
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 local
shops
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.
Moreover
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, local individuals are likely
lose
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 their jobs, increasing unemployment. Another problem is that
society
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 connections can be reduced. Because
,
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 many residents build relationships and interact
other
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with other
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 residents in their local
shops
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.
In addition
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, trading through oceans is likely to increase pollutants
such
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 as carbon dioxide and greenhouse gas, leading
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to environment
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environment
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environmental
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 problems.
On the other hand
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, my opinion is that
free-trading
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free trading
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 has many advantages.
First,
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free-trading
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free trading
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lead
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leads
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 to increasing global
economy
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economic
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growth
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 because of
trading
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the trading
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 of knowledge and resources between countries.
For instance
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, in Korea,
automobile
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the automobile
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 industry was introduced to other countries, thanks to FTA.
Therefore
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,
economy
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economic
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growth
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 in Korea had an
upwardtrend
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upward trend
. Another convincing reason is that consumers can get the
opportunities
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opportunity
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of
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the
choice
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choose
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 when they buy products.
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, buyers can experience other country’s food even if they don’t travel.
In other words
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,
free-trading
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free trading
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 offers various products from different countries. In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety
opinions
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of opinions
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 about
this
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 topic.
However
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, after considering
this
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 matter in a careful manner, I fully support that free-trading has many advantages
such
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 as
economy
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economic
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growth
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 and the opportunities of choice.

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Task Achievement
Ensure a more balanced discussion of both views, providing equal weight to each side before expressing your personal opinion.
Language
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structures to enhance clarity and readability.
Task Achievement
Provide more detailed examples to support your points, especially when discussing the positive aspects of free-trading.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay effectively sets up the discussion with a clear introduction and conclusion, encapsulating the main points well.
Task Response
The opinion is clearly stated and supported through logical reasoning.
Task Achievement
The essay highlights important aspects of free trade, such as economic growth and consumer choice, showing a good understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • comparative advantage
  • economic growth
  • global markets
  • job creation
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer benefits
  • competition
  • innovation
  • technology transfer
  • international markets
  • local industries
  • business closures
  • job losses
  • cultural identity
  • consumer preferences
  • economic dependence
  • international supply chains
  • environmental impact
  • carbon emissions
  • resource depletion
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