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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate how 100 visitors of the Parkway Hotel rated the
services
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 in two years 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, The results of
customer
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the customer
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services
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 assessment were divided into five points which are, excellent, satisfactory, very poor, good, and poor. The key feature is that in 2005 the majority of visitors rated the hotel as satisfactory
while
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 it was excellent and good in 2010. In 2005, 45% of the customers thought that the
services
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 were satisfactory which was the highest category in the rating.
However
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, the least area was excellent with only 5%.
Moreover
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, 21% rated the
services
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 as poor
whereas
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 poor and very poor had almost the same result.
On the other hand
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, the highest number in the evaluation of the hotel's
services
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 in 2010 was for good around 39% and followed by 28% for excellent.
Nevertheless
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, only 4% of the visitors rated it as very poor and 12% as poor.
Finally
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, the remaining 17% thought that
services
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was
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were
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 satisfactory.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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